Proposals 建議書
進階Proposals.
- Proposal = 未來行動建議書——和報告不同，重點是『提議做什麼』
- 結構：Aim → Proposal → Benefits → Cost → Conclusion
- 建議要具體：covered walkway with transparent panels，由 main gate 到 playground
文體小知識：Suggest action, explain benefits, ask for approval.
§課文原文 Passage
1Proposal for a Covered Walkway near the School Gate. Aim: The aim of this proposal is to solve the problem of flooding near the school gate on rainy days. At present, students without umbrellas arrive at lessons completely wet. The floor near the gate becomes slippery and dangerous, and last month two students slipped on the steps.
2Proposal: We suggest that the school should build a covered walkway from the main gate to the covered playground. This improvement to our infrastructure would benefit more than eight hundred students every rainy season. The walkway could be made of transparent panels so that sunlight still reaches the garden. It would also keep school bags and textbooks dry. The estimated cost is sixty thousand dollars, which could be paid from the school improvement fund.
3The plan is feasible because two nearby schools completed similar projects last year, and the works took only one holiday. A local contractor has already provided a free quotation, which is attached to this proposal. As the rainy season is coming soon, we hope the school will treat this matter as urgent. We would be happy to present our plan at the next staff meeting. Thank you for considering our suggestion.
§逐句中文翻譯 Sentence-by-sentence translation
Proposal for a Covered Walkway near the School Gate.
校門加建上蓋行人通道建議書。
Aim: The aim of this proposal is to solve the problem of flooding near the school gate on rainy days.
目的：本建議書旨在解決下雨天校門附近水浸的問題。
At present, students without umbrellas arrive at lessons completely wet.
現時，沒有帶傘的學生回到課室會全身濕透。
The floor near the gate becomes slippery and dangerous, and last month two students slipped on the steps.
校門附近的地面變得又滑又危險，上個月還有兩名學生在樓梯滑倒。
Proposal: We suggest that the school should build a covered walkway from the main gate to the covered playground.
建議：我們建議學校由正門建一條有蓋行人通道，直達有蓋操場。
This improvement to our infrastructure would benefit more than eight hundred students every rainy season.
這項基建改善在每個雨季可以惠及八百多名學生。
The walkway could be made of transparent panels so that sunlight still reaches the garden.
通道可以用透明板搭建，讓陽光仍然可以照到花園。
It would also keep school bags and textbooks dry.
它亦可以令書包同課本保持乾爽。
The estimated cost is sixty thousand dollars, which could be paid from the school improvement fund.
估計成本是六萬元，可以由學校改善工程基金支付。
The plan is feasible because two nearby schools completed similar projects last year, and the works took only one holiday.
這個計劃可行，因為附近兩所學校去年完成了類似工程，而且只是用了一個假期。
A local contractor has already provided a free quotation, which is attached to this proposal.
一間本地承辦商已經免費提供了報價單，隨本建議書附上。
As the rainy season is coming soon, we hope the school will treat this matter as urgent.
雨季快要到，我們希望學校將這件事列為緊急處理。
We would be happy to present our plan at the next staff meeting.
我們很樂意在下次教職員會議上介紹我們的計劃。
Thank you for considering our suggestion.
感謝您考慮我們的建議。
1重點摘要 Summary
Proposals.
2生字卡 Vocabulary
建議書。
好處。
成本。
基礎建設。
可行。
目的。
緊急。
3逐步講解 Steps
- AimAim 部分講明解決什麼問題。舉個例：The aim of this proposal is to solve the problem of flooding near the school gate on rainy days——一句鎖定問題。
- ProposalProposal 部分講具體方案。舉個例：build a covered walkway from the main gate to the covered playground，還講明用 transparent panels 等陽光照到入花園——方案越具體越可信。
- BenefitsBenefits 講好處，要計埋人數。舉個例：would benefit more than eight hundred students every rainy season、keep school bags and textbooks dry——好處要令對方（學校）都覺得著數。
- Cost + ConclusionCost 要有數：The estimated cost is sixty thousand dollars, which could be paid from the school improvement fund. Conclusion 請對方行動：we hope the school will treat this matter as urgent。
- 可行性證據可行性要證據：two nearby schools completed similar projects last year、A local contractor has already provided a free quotation——有先例、有報價，學校先敢批。
- Proposal vs ReportProposal 講未來行動（should / would / we suggest），Report 講已發生的事實（findings + 數據）。答題時分清楚：建議書是「提議做什麼」。
- 說服語氣語氣說服但客觀：We suggest that the school should build… · It would also keep… · We would be happy to present our plan at the next staff meeting——句句都是為對方著想。
5例題示範 Example
任務：寫一份建議書，建議學校在校門起有蓋行人路——要寫齊 Aim、Proposal、Benefits、Cost、Conclusion。
- 第一步：Aim 講明解決什麼問題——to solve the problem of flooding near the school gate on rainy days.
- 第二步：Proposal 講具體方案——build a covered walkway from the main gate to the covered playground.
- 第三步：Benefits 講好處——benefit more than eight hundred students and keep textbooks dry.
- 第四步：Cost + 可行性——The estimated cost is sixty thousand dollars; two nearby schools completed similar projects.
- 第五步：Conclusion 請對方批核——We hope the school will treat this matter as urgent.
- 答案：Proposal for a Covered Walkway near the School Gate
Aim: To solve the problem of flooding near the school gate on rainy days, when students arrive wet and the steps become slippery.
Proposal: We suggest building a covered walkway from the main gate to the covered playground, with transparent panels so sunlight still reaches the garden.
Benefits: It would keep more than eight hundred students and their textbooks dry every rainy season.
Cost: The estimated cost is sixty thousand dollars, payable from the school improvement fund.
Conclusion: As the rainy season is coming, we hope the school will treat this matter as urgent.
6常見錯誤 Mistakes
76 題快測 Quick check
Q1Proposal 和 report 分別？
Q2Proposal 結構？
Q3怎樣講好處？
Q4Proposal 語氣？
Q5結尾寫什麼？
Q6Should 和 would 分別？
8重點回顧 Recap
- Proposal = 未來行動建議書——和報告不同，重點是『提議做什麼』
- 結構：Aim → Proposal → Benefits → Cost → Conclusion
- 建議要具體：covered walkway with transparent panels，由 main gate 到 playground
- 可行性有證據：兩間附近學校做過、contractor 的 free quotation 已 attached
- 語氣用 would / should / we suggest；結尾請對方 treat it as urgent