Narrative Writing 记叙文写作

进阶

故事分三段:开头(人物时间地点)、中段(问题)、结尾(解决+感受),全文用过去式。

适合:中一英国语文 · 单元:写作 · 建议学习路径第 16/21 课

学完呢课,你会识:
  • 记叙文三段式:开头 who/where/when → 中段 problem → 结尾 solution + feelings
  • 开场制造气氛:Suddenly, I heard a soft cry behind a parked car.
  • 加五感细节:soft cry、brown fur、one white ear——读者先有画面
文体:Writing有声朗读

文体小知识:Show the story, don't just tell it.

英国语文English Language
读呢课前,你应该识: Writing Emails 电邮写作

§课文原文 Passage

1The Lost Puppy

2It was a hot Saturday afternoon, and I was walking home from the library with two heavy books in my bag. The sun was bright, and the streets were quiet. Suddenly, I heard a soft cry behind a parked car. A small puppy was sitting there, shaking and alone. It had brown fur, one white ear and no collar. 'Where is your owner?' I asked gently. The puppy only looked at me and cried again.

3The puppy looked at me with big sad eyes, so I gave it some water from my bottle. It drank quickly and wagged its tail. I asked the security guard to watch it while I searched the streets nearby. I knocked on doors, asked two shopkeepers and checked the noticeboard at the estate, but nobody knew the puppy. Half an hour later, a young woman ran towards us with a red collar in her hand. 'Coco! I have looked for you everywhere!' she shouted happily.

4The puppy jumped into her arms, and my heart felt warm. The owner thanked me three times and promised to buy Coco a new name tag. I walked home under the orange evening sky, tired but happy. That day I learned that small kindness can bring big happiness.

§逐句中文翻译 Sentence-by-sentence translation

The Lost Puppy

走失的小狗

It was a hot Saturday afternoon, and I was walking home from the library with two heavy books in my bag.

那天是炎热的星期六下午,我背著两本厚书由图书馆走回家。

The sun was bright, and the streets were quiet.

阳光很猛烈,街上很安静。

Suddenly, I heard a soft cry behind a parked car.

突然之间,我听到一架停在路边的车后面传来微弱的叫声。

A small puppy was sitting there, shaking and alone.

原来有一只小狗坐在那里,全身发抖,孤零零的。

It had brown fur, one white ear and no collar.

牠有棕色的毛、一只白耳朵,没有戴颈圈。

'Where is your owner?' I asked gently.

我低声问:「你的主人在哪里?」

The puppy only looked at me and cried again.

只小狗只是望著我,又再叫了起来。

The puppy looked at me with big sad eyes, so I gave it some water from my bottle.

只小狗用一对可怜的大眼睛望著我,所以我倒了些水给牠喝。

It drank quickly and wagged its tail.

牠很快喝完,还摇了摇尾巴。

I asked the security guard to watch it while I searched the streets nearby.

我请保安叔叔帮忙看著牠,自己就去附近的街道找一找。

I knocked on doors, asked two shopkeepers and checked the noticeboard at the estate, but nobody knew the puppy.

我敲过门、问过两个店主,又看过屋苑的告示板,但都没有人认得那只狗。

Half an hour later, a young woman ran towards us with a red collar in her hand.

半小时之后,有位年轻女士手里拿著红色颈圈跑过来。

'Coco! I have looked for you everywhere!' she shouted happily.

她开心地大叫:「Coco!我到处都找过你了!」

The puppy jumped into her arms, and my heart felt warm.

只小狗跳入她怀抱,我心里暖暖的。

The owner thanked me three times and promised to buy Coco a new name tag.

狗主多谢了我三次,还说要买一个新名牌给 Coco。

I walked home under the orange evening sky, tired but happy.

我在橙红色的黄昏天空下走回家,累但开心。

That day I learned that small kindness can bring big happiness.

那天我学会了,小小的善举可以带来大大的快乐。

1重点摘要 Summary

故事分三段:开头(人物时间地点)、中段(问题)、结尾(解决+感受),全文用过去式。

2生字卡 Vocabulary

N
Narrative记叙文

讲故事的文章。

P
Plot情节

故事的事件。

C
Character人物

故事中的人物。

S
Setting背景

时间和地点。

B
Beginning开头

故事的开始。

M
Middle中段

问题/事件。

E
Ending结尾

怎样收结。

D
Dialogue对话

人物之间的对话。

3逐步讲解 Steps

  1. Beginning时间地点人物第一段交代:It was a hot Saturday afternoon… walking home from the library with two heavy books——who / where / when 一句解决。
  2. Middle中段讲问题和你做过什么:asked the security guard、knocked on doors、checked the noticeboard——三个动作,情节就饱满。动作要有次序:First… Then… At last…——三步以上,情节自然有节奏,不会一笔过。
  3. Ending问题解决+心情收尾:The puppy jumped into her arms, and my heart felt warm… tired but happy.心情用身体反应写:my heart felt warm 比 I was happy 高级——由内到外写感受。
  4. 开场转折Suddenly 一出,故事开始:Suddenly, I heard a soft cry behind a parked car.——一只 shaking and alone 的 puppy 就是问题。
  5. 五感描写加细节给读者画面:soft cry(听)、brown fur, one white ear(看)、gave it some water(接触)。不要只有写 'a dog'。五感轮住用:声音(a soft cry)、画面(one white ear)、触感(some warm water)——三感已经立体。
  6. 对白点睛直接引语令故事生动:'Where is your owner?' I asked gently. 'Coco! I have looked for you everywhere!' she shouted happily.
  7. 感想点题最后一句讲教训:That day I learned that small kindness can bring big happiness.——记叙文标准收结,全文 past tense.

4图解 Diagrams

英文作文结构:三段式 Essay structureIntroduction 开头主题句 topic sentence讲明你会写乜Body 正文一段一个重点例证+解释Conclusion 结尾总结重申立场唔好引入新观点评分四围· Content 内容:扣题+丰富· Language 语言:文法准确多样· Organisation 组织:段落分明连贯· 格式:书信/报告格式要啱连贯贴士:用连接词First · Moreover · However · Therefore · In conclusion交卷前 check list:串字·时态一致·大小写·格式——五分钟救三分
图 1:英文作文三段式

5例题示范 Example

任务:以 A Lost Puppy 为题,用『开头-中段-结尾』三段式写一个帮助小动物的故事(全文过去式)。

  1. 第一步:开头交代 who / where / when——Last Saturday afternoon, I was walking home from the library.
  2. 第二步:中段带出 problem——I heard a soft cry behind a parked car. A small puppy was sitting there, shaking and alone.
  3. 第三步:照时间次序写你做过什么——I gave it some water… I asked the security guard to watch it.
  4. 第四步:结尾写 solution + 感受——The owner thanked me again and again. I was tired but happy.
  5. 第五步:全文 past tense 一用到底,加一句对白和感受令故事生动。
  6. 答案:Last Saturday afternoon, I was walking home from the library when I heard a soft cry behind a parked car. A small puppy with brown fur and one white ear was sitting there, shaking and alone. I gave it some water from my bottle and asked the security guard to watch it while I searched the streets nearby. Half an hour later, a young woman ran towards us, shouting, 'Coco! I have looked for you everywhere!' The puppy jumped into her arms, and she thanked me again and again. I walked home under the orange evening sky, tired but happy, because small kindness can bring big happiness.

6常见错误 Mistakes

✗ 没有时地人
✓ 开头交代
✗ 事件没有起承转合
✓ 有开展/高潮/结局
✗ 只叙事
✓ 加描写
✗ 结局太仓促
✓ 结局合理

75 题快测 Quick check

Q1What is a narrative?

Q2What is plot?

Q3What is setting?

Q4What is dialogue?

Q5Where is the problem?

8重点回顾 Recap

  • 记叙文三段式:开头 who/where/when → 中段 problem → 结尾 solution + feelings
  • 开场制造气氛:Suddenly, I heard a soft cry behind a parked car.
  • 加五感细节:soft cry、brown fur、one white ear——读者先有画面
  • 对白令故事生动:'Coco! I have looked for you everywhere!'
  • 全文 past tense;结尾加一句感想点题:small kindness can bring big happiness

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