Narrative Writing 记叙文写作
进阶故事分三段:开头(人物时间地点)、中段(问题)、结尾(解决+感受),全文用过去式。
- 记叙文三段式:开头 who/where/when → 中段 problem → 结尾 solution + feelings
- 开场制造气氛:Suddenly, I heard a soft cry behind a parked car.
- 加五感细节:soft cry、brown fur、one white ear——读者先有画面
文体小知识:Show the story, don't just tell it.
§课文原文 Passage
1The Lost Puppy
2It was a hot Saturday afternoon, and I was walking home from the library with two heavy books in my bag. The sun was bright, and the streets were quiet. Suddenly, I heard a soft cry behind a parked car. A small puppy was sitting there, shaking and alone. It had brown fur, one white ear and no collar. 'Where is your owner?' I asked gently. The puppy only looked at me and cried again.
3The puppy looked at me with big sad eyes, so I gave it some water from my bottle. It drank quickly and wagged its tail. I asked the security guard to watch it while I searched the streets nearby. I knocked on doors, asked two shopkeepers and checked the noticeboard at the estate, but nobody knew the puppy. Half an hour later, a young woman ran towards us with a red collar in her hand. 'Coco! I have looked for you everywhere!' she shouted happily.
4The puppy jumped into her arms, and my heart felt warm. The owner thanked me three times and promised to buy Coco a new name tag. I walked home under the orange evening sky, tired but happy. That day I learned that small kindness can bring big happiness.
§逐句中文翻译 Sentence-by-sentence translation
The Lost Puppy
走失的小狗
It was a hot Saturday afternoon, and I was walking home from the library with two heavy books in my bag.
那天是炎热的星期六下午,我背著两本厚书由图书馆走回家。
The sun was bright, and the streets were quiet.
阳光很猛烈,街上很安静。
Suddenly, I heard a soft cry behind a parked car.
突然之间,我听到一架停在路边的车后面传来微弱的叫声。
A small puppy was sitting there, shaking and alone.
原来有一只小狗坐在那里,全身发抖,孤零零的。
It had brown fur, one white ear and no collar.
牠有棕色的毛、一只白耳朵,没有戴颈圈。
'Where is your owner?' I asked gently.
我低声问:「你的主人在哪里?」
The puppy only looked at me and cried again.
只小狗只是望著我,又再叫了起来。
The puppy looked at me with big sad eyes, so I gave it some water from my bottle.
只小狗用一对可怜的大眼睛望著我,所以我倒了些水给牠喝。
It drank quickly and wagged its tail.
牠很快喝完,还摇了摇尾巴。
I asked the security guard to watch it while I searched the streets nearby.
我请保安叔叔帮忙看著牠,自己就去附近的街道找一找。
I knocked on doors, asked two shopkeepers and checked the noticeboard at the estate, but nobody knew the puppy.
我敲过门、问过两个店主,又看过屋苑的告示板,但都没有人认得那只狗。
Half an hour later, a young woman ran towards us with a red collar in her hand.
半小时之后,有位年轻女士手里拿著红色颈圈跑过来。
'Coco! I have looked for you everywhere!' she shouted happily.
她开心地大叫:「Coco!我到处都找过你了!」
The puppy jumped into her arms, and my heart felt warm.
只小狗跳入她怀抱,我心里暖暖的。
The owner thanked me three times and promised to buy Coco a new name tag.
狗主多谢了我三次,还说要买一个新名牌给 Coco。
I walked home under the orange evening sky, tired but happy.
我在橙红色的黄昏天空下走回家,累但开心。
That day I learned that small kindness can bring big happiness.
那天我学会了,小小的善举可以带来大大的快乐。
1重点摘要 Summary
故事分三段:开头(人物时间地点)、中段(问题)、结尾(解决+感受),全文用过去式。
2生字卡 Vocabulary
讲故事的文章。
故事的事件。
故事中的人物。
时间和地点。
故事的开始。
问题/事件。
怎样收结。
人物之间的对话。
3逐步讲解 Steps
- Beginning时间地点人物第一段交代:It was a hot Saturday afternoon… walking home from the library with two heavy books——who / where / when 一句解决。
- Middle中段讲问题和你做过什么:asked the security guard、knocked on doors、checked the noticeboard——三个动作,情节就饱满。动作要有次序:First… Then… At last…——三步以上,情节自然有节奏,不会一笔过。
- Ending问题解决+心情收尾:The puppy jumped into her arms, and my heart felt warm… tired but happy.心情用身体反应写:my heart felt warm 比 I was happy 高级——由内到外写感受。
- 开场转折Suddenly 一出,故事开始:Suddenly, I heard a soft cry behind a parked car.——一只 shaking and alone 的 puppy 就是问题。
- 五感描写加细节给读者画面:soft cry(听)、brown fur, one white ear(看)、gave it some water(接触)。不要只有写 'a dog'。五感轮住用:声音(a soft cry)、画面(one white ear)、触感(some warm water)——三感已经立体。
- 对白点睛直接引语令故事生动:'Where is your owner?' I asked gently. 'Coco! I have looked for you everywhere!' she shouted happily.
- 感想点题最后一句讲教训:That day I learned that small kindness can bring big happiness.——记叙文标准收结,全文 past tense.
4图解 Diagrams
5例题示范 Example
任务:以 A Lost Puppy 为题,用『开头-中段-结尾』三段式写一个帮助小动物的故事(全文过去式)。
- 第一步:开头交代 who / where / when——Last Saturday afternoon, I was walking home from the library.
- 第二步:中段带出 problem——I heard a soft cry behind a parked car. A small puppy was sitting there, shaking and alone.
- 第三步:照时间次序写你做过什么——I gave it some water… I asked the security guard to watch it.
- 第四步:结尾写 solution + 感受——The owner thanked me again and again. I was tired but happy.
- 第五步:全文 past tense 一用到底,加一句对白和感受令故事生动。
- 答案:Last Saturday afternoon, I was walking home from the library when I heard a soft cry behind a parked car. A small puppy with brown fur and one white ear was sitting there, shaking and alone. I gave it some water from my bottle and asked the security guard to watch it while I searched the streets nearby. Half an hour later, a young woman ran towards us, shouting, 'Coco! I have looked for you everywhere!' The puppy jumped into her arms, and she thanked me again and again. I walked home under the orange evening sky, tired but happy, because small kindness can bring big happiness.
6常见错误 Mistakes
75 题快测 Quick check
Q1What is a narrative?
Q2What is plot?
Q3What is setting?
Q4What is dialogue?
Q5Where is the problem?
8重点回顾 Recap
- 记叙文三段式:开头 who/where/when → 中段 problem → 结尾 solution + feelings
- 开场制造气氛:Suddenly, I heard a soft cry behind a parked car.
- 加五感细节:soft cry、brown fur、one white ear——读者先有画面
- 对白令故事生动:'Coco! I have looked for you everywhere!'
- 全文 past tense;结尾加一句感想点题:small kindness can bring big happiness