Writing Emails 电邮写作
基础一封好 email 有五部分：主旨、称呼、目的、内容、有礼貌的结尾。
- Email 五部曲：subject line → 称呼 → 目的 → 内容 → 礼貌结尾
- Subject 要具体：Question about question five，不要斋写 Question
- 第一句讲明目的：I am writing to ask about… / I am sorry to trouble you, but…
文体小知识：Short, clear and polite.
§课文原文 Passage
1To: Miss Ho (our form teacher). Cc: Sam Lee (class monitor, 1A). Subject: Question about question five of the English homework.
2Dear Miss Ho, I am Amy Cheung from Class 1A. I am sorry to trouble you, but I do not understand question five of yesterday's English homework. The question asks us to describe a photo with the present continuous tense, but I am not sure when to add 'is' or 'are' to the verbs. I have read the notes on page twelve twice, yet I still cannot find the answer. My classmates say your explanations are always clear, so I hope you can help me. Could you please explain it to me after school tomorrow? I am free from three thirty to five o'clock, so any time is fine for me. I have attached a photo of my work to this email so that you can see my attempt.
3Please also cc my class monitor Sam so that he knows about the problem, because he offered to help me revise first. If you are busy tomorrow, I can also come on Thursday or Friday after school. Thank you for your time, and I look forward to your reply. Best wishes, Amy Cheung (Class 1A)
§逐句中文翻译 Sentence-by-sentence translation
To: Miss Ho (our form teacher).
收件人：何老师（我们班主任）。
Cc: Sam Lee (class monitor, 1A).
副本：1A 班班长李森。
Subject: Question about question five of the English homework.
主旨：关于英文功课第五题的疑问。
Dear Miss Ho,
何老师：
I am Amy Cheung from Class 1A.
我是 1A 班的张美欣。
I am sorry to trouble you, but I do not understand question five of yesterday's English homework.
不好意思打扰你，但是我不明白昨天英文功课第五题。
The question asks us to describe a photo with the present continuous tense, but I am not sure when to add 'is' or 'are' to the verbs.
那道题目要我们用现在进行式描述一张相，但是我不肯定什么时候要在动词前面加 is 或者 are。
I have read the notes on page twelve twice, yet I still cannot find the answer.
我已经看了第十二页的笔记两次，但仍然找不到答案。
My classmates say your explanations are always clear, so I hope you can help me.
同学都说你的讲解很清楚，所以我希望你可以帮助我。
Could you please explain it to me after school tomorrow?
可不可以明天放学之后和我讲解一下？
I am free from three thirty to five o'clock, so any time is fine for me.
我三点半到五点都方便，任何时间都可以。
I have attached a photo of my work to this email so that you can see my attempt.
我已经在这封电邮附上我的功课照片，让你可以看到我怎么做。
Please also cc my class monitor Sam so that he knows about the problem, because he offered to help me revise first.
麻烦顺便抄送给班长 Sam，让他也知道这个问题，因为他说会先帮我温习。
If you are busy tomorrow, I can also come on Thursday or Friday after school.
如果你明天不有空，我星期四或者星期五放学都可以来。
Thank you for your time, and I look forward to your reply.
多谢你抽时间看，我期待你的回复。
Best wishes,
祝好，
Amy Cheung (Class 1A)
1A 班 张美欣
1重点摘要 Summary
一封好 email 有五部分：主旨、称呼、目的、内容、有礼貌的结尾。
2生字卡 Vocabulary
电邮的标题。
Dear... / Hi...
主要的讯息。
Best wishes...
To: 栏。
随电邮附上的档案。
Carbon copy。
写回复。
3逐步讲解 Steps
- 标题标题要具体：Question about question five of the English homework——收件人一看就知什么事，不要斋写 Question.标题公式：主题＋疑问字——Question about… / Request for… / Thank you for…——三分类一眼明。
- 问候Dear + 称谓：Dear Miss Ho. 不知对方名就用 Dear Sir or Madam。第一句表明身份：I am Amy Cheung from Class 1A.称谓跟身份：老师用 Miss / Mr＋姓；机构用 Dear Sir or Madam；收尾对应 Yours faithfully。
- 正文一段一个重点：P1 讲问题（question five、present continuous 不知用 is 还是 are）；P2 讲安排（cc Sam、Thursday or Friday 后备时间）。转段有讯号：Besides / As for the next point——一段一主意，读的人先跟得上。
- 结语Thank you for your time, and I look forward to your reply. Best wishes, Amy Cheung (Class 1A)——结语＋全名＋班别。
- 讲明目的第一段讲目的兼有礼：I am sorry to trouble you, but I do not understand question five.——讲清楚卡在边，老师先救到你。问问题要有具体位：不是 I don't understand it，而是 I am not sure when to use is or are——老师一眼就知点教你。
- 礼貌请求Could you please + 动词？加起来方便时间：Could you please explain it to me after school tomorrow? I am free from three thirty to five o'clock.
- 附件副本有附件要写明：I have attached a photo of my work. Cc 相关人：Please also cc my class monitor Sam so that he knows.
4图解 Diagrams
5例题示范 Example
任务：你不明英文功课第五题（present continuous 什么时候用 is / are），写一封 email 问班主任。
- 第一步：写具体 subject line——Question about question five of the English homework（不要斋写 Question）。
- 第二步：称呼 + 自我介绍——Dear Miss Ho, I am Amy Cheung from Class 1A.
- 第三步：第一句讲明目的，讲清楚不明什么——I am writing to ask about question five… I am not sure when to use 'is' or 'are'.
- 第四步：提出具体请求和方便时间——Could you please explain it after school tomorrow? I am free from three thirty to five o'clock.
- 第五步：有礼收结——Thank you for your time… Best wishes, Amy Cheung (Class 1A)。
- 答案：Subject: Question about question five of the English homework
Dear Miss Ho,
I am Amy Cheung from Class 1A. I am sorry to trouble you, but I do not understand question five of yesterday's English homework. I am not sure when to use 'is' or 'are' with the present continuous tense, and I cannot find the answer in my notes. Could you please explain it to me after school tomorrow? I am free from three thirty to five o'clock. I have also attached a photo of my work.
Thank you for your time, and I look forward to your reply.
Best wishes,
Amy Cheung (Class 1A)
6常见错误 Mistakes
75 题快测 Quick check
Q1Where do you write email title?
Q2How do you start an email?
Q3What is the main message called?
Q4What do you add at the end?
Q5What is an attachment?
8重点回顾 Recap
- Email 五部曲：subject line → 称呼 → 目的 → 内容 → 礼貌结尾
- Subject 要具体：Question about question five，不要斋写 Question
- 第一句讲明目的：I am writing to ask about… / I am sorry to trouble you, but…
- 请求用 Could you please…? 并提供方便时间：I am free from three thirty to five.
- Cc 相关人等（class monitor Sam）、有 attachment 就写明 I have attached…