Narrative Writing 記敘文寫作
進階故事分三段:開頭(人物時間地點)、中段(問題)、結尾(解決+感受),全文用過去式。
- 記敘文三段式:開頭 who/where/when → 中段 problem → 結尾 solution + feelings
- 開場製造氣氛:Suddenly, I heard a soft cry behind a parked car.
- 加五感細節:soft cry、brown fur、one white ear——讀者先有畫面
文體小知識:Show the story, don't just tell it.
§課文原文 Passage
1The Lost Puppy
2It was a hot Saturday afternoon, and I was walking home from the library with two heavy books in my bag. The sun was bright, and the streets were quiet. Suddenly, I heard a soft cry behind a parked car. A small puppy was sitting there, shaking and alone. It had brown fur, one white ear and no collar. 'Where is your owner?' I asked gently. The puppy only looked at me and cried again.
3The puppy looked at me with big sad eyes, so I gave it some water from my bottle. It drank quickly and wagged its tail. I asked the security guard to watch it while I searched the streets nearby. I knocked on doors, asked two shopkeepers and checked the noticeboard at the estate, but nobody knew the puppy. Half an hour later, a young woman ran towards us with a red collar in her hand. 'Coco! I have looked for you everywhere!' she shouted happily.
4The puppy jumped into her arms, and my heart felt warm. The owner thanked me three times and promised to buy Coco a new name tag. I walked home under the orange evening sky, tired but happy. That day I learned that small kindness can bring big happiness.
§逐句中文翻譯 Sentence-by-sentence translation
The Lost Puppy
走失的小狗
It was a hot Saturday afternoon, and I was walking home from the library with two heavy books in my bag.
那天是炎熱的星期六下午,我背著兩本厚書由圖書館走回家。
The sun was bright, and the streets were quiet.
陽光很猛烈,街上很安靜。
Suddenly, I heard a soft cry behind a parked car.
突然之間,我聽到一架停在路邊的車後面傳來微弱的叫聲。
A small puppy was sitting there, shaking and alone.
原來有一隻小狗坐在那裡,全身發抖,孤零零的。
It had brown fur, one white ear and no collar.
牠有棕色的毛、一隻白耳朵,沒有戴頸圈。
'Where is your owner?' I asked gently.
我低聲問:「你的主人在哪裡?」
The puppy only looked at me and cried again.
隻小狗只是望著我,又再叫了起來。
The puppy looked at me with big sad eyes, so I gave it some water from my bottle.
隻小狗用一對可憐的大眼睛望著我,所以我倒了些水給牠喝。
It drank quickly and wagged its tail.
牠很快喝完,還搖了搖尾巴。
I asked the security guard to watch it while I searched the streets nearby.
我請保安叔叔幫忙看著牠,自己就去附近的街道找一找。
I knocked on doors, asked two shopkeepers and checked the noticeboard at the estate, but nobody knew the puppy.
我敲過門、問過兩個店主,又看過屋苑的告示板,但都沒有人認得那隻狗。
Half an hour later, a young woman ran towards us with a red collar in her hand.
半小時之後,有位年輕女士手裡拿著紅色頸圈跑過來。
'Coco! I have looked for you everywhere!' she shouted happily.
她開心地大叫:「Coco!我到處都找過你了!」
The puppy jumped into her arms, and my heart felt warm.
隻小狗跳入她懷抱,我心裡暖暖的。
The owner thanked me three times and promised to buy Coco a new name tag.
狗主多謝了我三次,還說要買一個新名牌給 Coco。
I walked home under the orange evening sky, tired but happy.
我在橙紅色的黃昏天空下走回家,累但開心。
That day I learned that small kindness can bring big happiness.
那天我學會了,小小的善舉可以帶來大大的快樂。
1重點摘要 Summary
故事分三段:開頭(人物時間地點)、中段(問題)、結尾(解決+感受),全文用過去式。
2生字卡 Vocabulary
講故事的文章。
故事的事件。
故事中的人物。
時間和地點。
故事的開始。
問題/事件。
怎樣收結。
人物之間的對話。
3逐步講解 Steps
- Beginning時間地點人物第一段交代:It was a hot Saturday afternoon… walking home from the library with two heavy books——who / where / when 一句解決。
- Middle中段講問題和你做過什麼:asked the security guard、knocked on doors、checked the noticeboard——三個動作,情節就飽滿。動作要有次序:First… Then… At last…——三步以上,情節自然有節奏,不會一筆過。
- Ending問題解決+心情收尾:The puppy jumped into her arms, and my heart felt warm… tired but happy.心情用身體反應寫:my heart felt warm 比 I was happy 高級——由內到外寫感受。
- 開場轉折Suddenly 一出,故事開始:Suddenly, I heard a soft cry behind a parked car.——一隻 shaking and alone 的 puppy 就是問題。
- 五感描寫加細節給讀者畫面:soft cry(聽)、brown fur, one white ear(看)、gave it some water(接觸)。不要只有寫 'a dog'。五感輪住用:聲音(a soft cry)、畫面(one white ear)、觸感(some warm water)——三感已經立體。
- 對白點睛直接引語令故事生動:'Where is your owner?' I asked gently. 'Coco! I have looked for you everywhere!' she shouted happily.
- 感想點題最後一句講教訓:That day I learned that small kindness can bring big happiness.——記敘文標準收結,全文 past tense.
4圖解 Diagrams
5例題示範 Example
任務:以 A Lost Puppy 為題,用『開頭-中段-結尾』三段式寫一個幫助小動物的故事(全文過去式)。
- 第一步:開頭交代 who / where / when——Last Saturday afternoon, I was walking home from the library.
- 第二步:中段帶出 problem——I heard a soft cry behind a parked car. A small puppy was sitting there, shaking and alone.
- 第三步:照時間次序寫你做過什麼——I gave it some water… I asked the security guard to watch it.
- 第四步:結尾寫 solution + 感受——The owner thanked me again and again. I was tired but happy.
- 第五步:全文 past tense 一用到底,加一句對白和感受令故事生動。
- 答案:Last Saturday afternoon, I was walking home from the library when I heard a soft cry behind a parked car. A small puppy with brown fur and one white ear was sitting there, shaking and alone. I gave it some water from my bottle and asked the security guard to watch it while I searched the streets nearby. Half an hour later, a young woman ran towards us, shouting, 'Coco! I have looked for you everywhere!' The puppy jumped into her arms, and she thanked me again and again. I walked home under the orange evening sky, tired but happy, because small kindness can bring big happiness.
6常見錯誤 Mistakes
75 題快測 Quick check
Q1What is a narrative?
Q2What is plot?
Q3What is setting?
Q4What is dialogue?
Q5Where is the problem?
8重點回顧 Recap
- 記敘文三段式:開頭 who/where/when → 中段 problem → 結尾 solution + feelings
- 開場製造氣氛:Suddenly, I heard a soft cry behind a parked car.
- 加五感細節:soft cry、brown fur、one white ear——讀者先有畫面
- 對白令故事生動:'Coco! I have looked for you everywhere!'
- 全文 past tense;結尾加一句感想點題:small kindness can bring big happiness