Narrative Writing 記敘文寫作

進階

故事分三段:開頭(人物時間地點)、中段(問題)、結尾(解決+感受),全文用過去式。

適合:中一英國語文 · 單元:寫作 · 建議學習路徑第 16/21 課

學完呢課,你會識:
  • 記敘文三段式:開頭 who/where/when → 中段 problem → 結尾 solution + feelings
  • 開場製造氣氛:Suddenly, I heard a soft cry behind a parked car.
  • 加五感細節:soft cry、brown fur、one white ear——讀者先有畫面
文體:Writing有聲朗讀

文體小知識:Show the story, don't just tell it.

英國語文English Language
讀呢課前,你應該識: Writing Emails 電郵寫作

§課文原文 Passage

1The Lost Puppy

2It was a hot Saturday afternoon, and I was walking home from the library with two heavy books in my bag. The sun was bright, and the streets were quiet. Suddenly, I heard a soft cry behind a parked car. A small puppy was sitting there, shaking and alone. It had brown fur, one white ear and no collar. 'Where is your owner?' I asked gently. The puppy only looked at me and cried again.

3The puppy looked at me with big sad eyes, so I gave it some water from my bottle. It drank quickly and wagged its tail. I asked the security guard to watch it while I searched the streets nearby. I knocked on doors, asked two shopkeepers and checked the noticeboard at the estate, but nobody knew the puppy. Half an hour later, a young woman ran towards us with a red collar in her hand. 'Coco! I have looked for you everywhere!' she shouted happily.

4The puppy jumped into her arms, and my heart felt warm. The owner thanked me three times and promised to buy Coco a new name tag. I walked home under the orange evening sky, tired but happy. That day I learned that small kindness can bring big happiness.

§逐句中文翻譯 Sentence-by-sentence translation

The Lost Puppy

走失的小狗

It was a hot Saturday afternoon, and I was walking home from the library with two heavy books in my bag.

那天是炎熱的星期六下午,我背著兩本厚書由圖書館走回家。

The sun was bright, and the streets were quiet.

陽光很猛烈,街上很安靜。

Suddenly, I heard a soft cry behind a parked car.

突然之間,我聽到一架停在路邊的車後面傳來微弱的叫聲。

A small puppy was sitting there, shaking and alone.

原來有一隻小狗坐在那裡,全身發抖,孤零零的。

It had brown fur, one white ear and no collar.

牠有棕色的毛、一隻白耳朵,沒有戴頸圈。

'Where is your owner?' I asked gently.

我低聲問:「你的主人在哪裡?」

The puppy only looked at me and cried again.

隻小狗只是望著我,又再叫了起來。

The puppy looked at me with big sad eyes, so I gave it some water from my bottle.

隻小狗用一對可憐的大眼睛望著我,所以我倒了些水給牠喝。

It drank quickly and wagged its tail.

牠很快喝完,還搖了搖尾巴。

I asked the security guard to watch it while I searched the streets nearby.

我請保安叔叔幫忙看著牠,自己就去附近的街道找一找。

I knocked on doors, asked two shopkeepers and checked the noticeboard at the estate, but nobody knew the puppy.

我敲過門、問過兩個店主,又看過屋苑的告示板,但都沒有人認得那隻狗。

Half an hour later, a young woman ran towards us with a red collar in her hand.

半小時之後,有位年輕女士手裡拿著紅色頸圈跑過來。

'Coco! I have looked for you everywhere!' she shouted happily.

她開心地大叫:「Coco!我到處都找過你了!」

The puppy jumped into her arms, and my heart felt warm.

隻小狗跳入她懷抱,我心裡暖暖的。

The owner thanked me three times and promised to buy Coco a new name tag.

狗主多謝了我三次,還說要買一個新名牌給 Coco。

I walked home under the orange evening sky, tired but happy.

我在橙紅色的黃昏天空下走回家,累但開心。

That day I learned that small kindness can bring big happiness.

那天我學會了,小小的善舉可以帶來大大的快樂。

1重點摘要 Summary

故事分三段:開頭(人物時間地點)、中段(問題)、結尾(解決+感受),全文用過去式。

2生字卡 Vocabulary

N
Narrative記敘文

講故事的文章。

P
Plot情節

故事的事件。

C
Character人物

故事中的人物。

S
Setting背景

時間和地點。

B
Beginning開頭

故事的開始。

M
Middle中段

問題/事件。

E
Ending結尾

怎樣收結。

D
Dialogue對話

人物之間的對話。

3逐步講解 Steps

  1. Beginning時間地點人物第一段交代:It was a hot Saturday afternoon… walking home from the library with two heavy books——who / where / when 一句解決。
  2. Middle中段講問題和你做過什麼:asked the security guard、knocked on doors、checked the noticeboard——三個動作,情節就飽滿。動作要有次序:First… Then… At last…——三步以上,情節自然有節奏,不會一筆過。
  3. Ending問題解決+心情收尾:The puppy jumped into her arms, and my heart felt warm… tired but happy.心情用身體反應寫:my heart felt warm 比 I was happy 高級——由內到外寫感受。
  4. 開場轉折Suddenly 一出,故事開始:Suddenly, I heard a soft cry behind a parked car.——一隻 shaking and alone 的 puppy 就是問題。
  5. 五感描寫加細節給讀者畫面:soft cry(聽)、brown fur, one white ear(看)、gave it some water(接觸)。不要只有寫 'a dog'。五感輪住用:聲音(a soft cry)、畫面(one white ear)、觸感(some warm water)——三感已經立體。
  6. 對白點睛直接引語令故事生動:'Where is your owner?' I asked gently. 'Coco! I have looked for you everywhere!' she shouted happily.
  7. 感想點題最後一句講教訓:That day I learned that small kindness can bring big happiness.——記敘文標準收結,全文 past tense.

4圖解 Diagrams

英文作文結構:三段式 Essay structureIntroduction 開頭主題句 topic sentence講明你會寫乜Body 正文一段一個重點例證+解釋Conclusion 結尾總結重申立場唔好引入新觀點評分四圍· Content 內容:扣題+豐富· Language 語言:文法準確多樣· Organisation 組織:段落分明連貫· 格式:書信/報告格式要啱連貫貼士:用連接詞First · Moreover · However · Therefore · In conclusion交卷前 check list:串字·時態一致·大小寫·格式——五分鐘救三分
圖 1:英文作文三段式

5例題示範 Example

任務:以 A Lost Puppy 為題,用『開頭-中段-結尾』三段式寫一個幫助小動物的故事(全文過去式)。

  1. 第一步:開頭交代 who / where / when——Last Saturday afternoon, I was walking home from the library.
  2. 第二步:中段帶出 problem——I heard a soft cry behind a parked car. A small puppy was sitting there, shaking and alone.
  3. 第三步:照時間次序寫你做過什麼——I gave it some water… I asked the security guard to watch it.
  4. 第四步:結尾寫 solution + 感受——The owner thanked me again and again. I was tired but happy.
  5. 第五步:全文 past tense 一用到底,加一句對白和感受令故事生動。
  6. 答案:Last Saturday afternoon, I was walking home from the library when I heard a soft cry behind a parked car. A small puppy with brown fur and one white ear was sitting there, shaking and alone. I gave it some water from my bottle and asked the security guard to watch it while I searched the streets nearby. Half an hour later, a young woman ran towards us, shouting, 'Coco! I have looked for you everywhere!' The puppy jumped into her arms, and she thanked me again and again. I walked home under the orange evening sky, tired but happy, because small kindness can bring big happiness.

6常見錯誤 Mistakes

✗ 沒有時地人
✓ 開頭交代
✗ 事件沒有起承轉合
✓ 有開展/高潮/結局
✗ 只敘事
✓ 加描寫
✗ 結局太倉促
✓ 結局合理

75 題快測 Quick check

Q1What is a narrative?

Q2What is plot?

Q3What is setting?

Q4What is dialogue?

Q5Where is the problem?

8重點回顧 Recap

  • 記敘文三段式:開頭 who/where/when → 中段 problem → 結尾 solution + feelings
  • 開場製造氣氛:Suddenly, I heard a soft cry behind a parked car.
  • 加五感細節:soft cry、brown fur、one white ear——讀者先有畫面
  • 對白令故事生動:'Coco! I have looked for you everywhere!'
  • 全文 past tense;結尾加一句感想點題:small kindness can bring big happiness

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