Diary Writing 日記
基礎日期天氣開頭。
- 日記格式：日期 → 天氣 → Dear Diary。
- 記當日事用過去式。
- 事件 + 感受才有溫度。
文體小知識：Date, feelings, events.
§課文原文 Passage
1Friday, 20th March
Weather: Rainy
2Today was a day full of surprises. I was a little sad at first because of the rain, as we could not play outside at lunchtime. In the morning, I felt nervous because we had a maths test. When I opened the paper, my mind went blank for a moment. Luckily, I remembered Ms Lee's tips and finished every question. I felt like a hero when I handed in my paper.
3In the afternoon, our class teacher announced the results of the art competition. I felt excited when she called my name — I won first prize! My painting of the harbour will be shown in the school hall. My friends jumped up and shouted, 'Well done!' I was so happy that I almost cried.
4After school, Mum bought me a mango cake to celebrate. We shared it with Grandma and talked about my day. I felt happy and thankful at the same time. Even the rain could not wash away my smile. I will keep this page in my diary and smile again every time I read it. I am excited about tomorrow too.
§逐句中文翻譯 Sentence-by-sentence translation
Friday, 20th March
三月二十日，星期五
Weather: Rainy
天氣：雨
Today was a day full of surprises.
今日是充滿驚喜的一日。
I was a little sad at first because of the rain, as we could not play outside at lunchtime.
起初我因為下雨有一點不開心，因為午飯時間不能到外面玩。
In the morning, I felt nervous because we had a maths test.
早上我很緊張，因為有數學測驗。
When I opened the paper, my mind went blank for a moment.
一打開試卷，我腦海空白了一瞬間。
Luckily, I remembered Ms Lee's tips and finished every question.
幸好我記得李老師的貼士，做完了所有題目。
I felt like a hero when I handed in my paper.
交卷那刻，我覺得自己好像英雄。
In the afternoon, our class teacher announced the results of the art competition.
下午，班主任宣布美術比賽的結果。
I felt excited when she called my name — I won first prize!
她叫到我的名字時，我興奮得跳起來——我拿了第一名！
My painting of the harbour will be shown in the school hall.
我那幅海港畫會在學校禮堂展出。
My friends jumped up and shouted, 'Well done!'
朋友們跳起來大叫：「做得好！」
I was so happy that I almost cried.
我開心到差點哭出來。
After school, Mum bought me a mango cake to celebrate.
放學後，媽咪買了個芒果蛋糕同我慶祝。
We shared it with Grandma and talked about my day.
我們同奶奶一起分享，還聊了我今日的事。
I felt happy and thankful at the same time.
我又開心又感恩。
Even the rain could not wash away my smile.
連這場雨都沖不走我的笑容。
I will keep this page in my diary and smile again every time I read it.
我會將這一頁留在日記裡，將來每次翻看都會笑。
I am excited about tomorrow too.
我也很期待明天。
1重點摘要 Summary
日期天氣開頭。
2生字卡 Vocabulary
日記。
今日。
感覺。
開心。
傷心。
興奮。
緊張。
記得。
3逐步講解 Steps
- 格式考點是日記格式的頭兩行：先寫日期與天氣，例如 Saturday, 21st March. Weather: Sunny. 日期包括星期、日子與月份，天氣用一個詞。方法是把這兩項當常常記的固定抬頭，每次動筆先寫齊。寫齊這兩項，日後重溫便一目了然，知道那天是星期幾、天氣如何，回憶便有憑據。易錯之處是漏寫天氣，或把星期與月份的開頭字母細寫；抬頭寫得規矩，格式分便穩拿，這是日記題的第一關。
- 時態考點是日記的時態：記述當天發生的事，主體用過去式，例如 I went to Ocean Park and saw the pandas. went 與 saw 都是不規則過去式，要個別記牢。方法是先定時態的框架：記事用過去式，談現在的想法用現在式，寫將來的計劃用將來式，三種時態各司其職。易錯之處是全篇現在式，把已發生的事寫成 I go、I see；動筆前先問自己：這件事發生了沒有？發生了便用過去式，這一問能避免大半時態錯誤。
- 內容考點是日記內容的配搭：事件加感受，例如 I saw pandas. I was so excited! 方法是挑一至兩件最難忘的事來寫，每件事後面跟一句感受。只記事而沒有感受，日記便像流水帳；情感才令文字有溫度。易錯之處是寫了五六件事卻每件一筆帶過，篇篇平面；倒不如集中寫一兩件，寫得深入，事件與感受交替出現，日記讀起來便立體動人，這也是內容分的關鍵。
- 第一人稱考點是日記的人稱：用第一人稱 I 書寫，句子直接而親切，例如 I was so happy that I smiled all day. 方法是全篇保持同一人稱，由第一句到最後一句都是 I。日記的好處是可以直接寫出心底想法，這是日記與其他文體的分別，也是它最動人的地方。易錯之處是人稱忽然轉換，由 I 跳成 he 或 she，讀者便糊塗了；寫完檢查一遍人稱，前後一致才交卷，這是穩分的最後一步。
- 格式三行考點是日記開頭的三行格式：日期 Friday, 20th March、天氣 Rainy、稱呼 Dear Diary。三行從上而下依次寫好，然後才開始正文。Dear Diary 是日記的傳統稱呼，令文章像與老朋友交談，語氣自然親切。易錯之處是三行次序顛倒，或漏寫稱呼；格式是日記的門面，三行寫得整整齊齊，閱卷者一看便知基本功扎實，這一關切不可失，練習時便要按三行的次序養成習慣。
- 事件配感受考點是事件配感受的寫法：每寫一件事，便補上一句感受，例如 I saw pandas. I was so excited! 感受句用 I was 加情緒形容詞，如 excited、tired、proud，事件與感受交替出現，日記讀起來才立體。易錯之處是感受句千篇一律，全篇只會一個 happy；情緒詞宜輪流運用，高興、疲倦、自豪各有各的寫法，情感便有層次，文章便有起伏，這是日記寫得動人的秘訣。
5例題示範 Example
問題：怎樣寫一篇暢遊海洋公園的日記？按格式、總起、事件、感受與期望五步完成。
- 第一步：寫格式 — Saturday, 21st March. Weather: Sunny. 日期與天氣兩項先寫好。
- 第二步：總起一句 — Today was the best day! 感嘆句開場，心情立刻呈現。
- 第三步：記事件用過去式 — I went to Ocean Park and saw the pandas. went 與 saw 都是不規則過去式。
- 第四步：每事配感受 — I was so excited! The hot dogs were delicious too. 興奮與美味各有感受句。
- 第五步：期望收結 — I will go again next year. 用將來式寫出願望，日記圓滿結束。
- 答案：示範答案：Saturday, 21st March. Weather: Sunny. Today was the best day! I went to Ocean Park and saw the pandas. I was so excited! I will go again next year. 格式、事件、感受與期望俱全，是一篇完整的小學生日記。
6常見錯誤 Mistakes
76 題快測 Quick check
Q1日記第一行寫什麼？
Q2日記用什麼時態？
Q3日記寫什麼？
Q4日記用第一人稱？
Q5日記結尾？
Q6weather 例子？
8重點回顧 Recap
- 日記格式：日期 → 天氣 → Dear Diary。
- 記當日事用過去式。
- 事件 + 感受才有溫度。
- 第一人稱 I 貫穿全篇。
- 結尾可以展望：I will go again next year.