Diary Writing 日记
基础日期天气开头。
- 日记格式：日期 → 天气 → Dear Diary。
- 记当日事用过去式。
- 事件 + 感受才有温度。
文体小知识：Date, feelings, events.
§课文原文 Passage
1Friday, 20th March
Weather: Rainy
2Today was a day full of surprises. I was a little sad at first because of the rain, as we could not play outside at lunchtime. In the morning, I felt nervous because we had a maths test. When I opened the paper, my mind went blank for a moment. Luckily, I remembered Ms Lee's tips and finished every question. I felt like a hero when I handed in my paper.
3In the afternoon, our class teacher announced the results of the art competition. I felt excited when she called my name — I won first prize! My painting of the harbour will be shown in the school hall. My friends jumped up and shouted, 'Well done!' I was so happy that I almost cried.
4After school, Mum bought me a mango cake to celebrate. We shared it with Grandma and talked about my day. I felt happy and thankful at the same time. Even the rain could not wash away my smile. I will keep this page in my diary and smile again every time I read it. I am excited about tomorrow too.
§逐句中文翻译 Sentence-by-sentence translation
Friday, 20th March
三月二十日，星期五
Weather: Rainy
天气：雨
Today was a day full of surprises.
今日是充满惊喜的一日。
I was a little sad at first because of the rain, as we could not play outside at lunchtime.
起初我因为下雨有一点不开心，因为午饭时间不能到外面玩。
In the morning, I felt nervous because we had a maths test.
早上我很紧张，因为有数学测验。
When I opened the paper, my mind went blank for a moment.
一打开试卷，我脑海空白了一瞬间。
Luckily, I remembered Ms Lee's tips and finished every question.
幸好我记得李老师的贴士，做完了所有题目。
I felt like a hero when I handed in my paper.
交卷那刻，我觉得自己好像英雄。
In the afternoon, our class teacher announced the results of the art competition.
下午，班主任宣布美术比赛的结果。
I felt excited when she called my name — I won first prize!
她叫到我的名字时，我兴奋得跳起来——我拿了第一名！
My painting of the harbour will be shown in the school hall.
我那幅海港画会在学校礼堂展出。
My friends jumped up and shouted, 'Well done!'
朋友们跳起来大叫：「做得好！」
I was so happy that I almost cried.
我开心到差点哭出来。
After school, Mum bought me a mango cake to celebrate.
放学后，妈咪买了个芒果蛋糕同我庆祝。
We shared it with Grandma and talked about my day.
我们同奶奶一起分享，还聊了我今日的事。
I felt happy and thankful at the same time.
我又开心又感恩。
Even the rain could not wash away my smile.
连这场雨都冲不走我的笑容。
I will keep this page in my diary and smile again every time I read it.
我会将这一页留在日记里，将来每次翻看都会笑。
I am excited about tomorrow too.
我也很期待明天。
1重点摘要 Summary
日期天气开头。
2生字卡 Vocabulary
日记。
今日。
感觉。
开心。
伤心。
兴奋。
紧张。
记得。
3逐步讲解 Steps
- 格式考点是日记格式的头两行：先写日期与天气，例如 Saturday, 21st March. Weather: Sunny. 日期包括星期、日子与月份，天气用一个词。方法是把这两项当常常记的固定抬头，每次动笔先写齐。写齐这两项，日后重温便一目了然，知道那天是星期几、天气如何，回忆便有凭据。易错之处是漏写天气，或把星期与月份的开头字母细写；抬头写得规矩，格式分便稳拿，这是日记题的第一关。
- 时态考点是日记的时态：记述当天发生的事，主体用过去式，例如 I went to Ocean Park and saw the pandas. went 与 saw 都是不规则过去式，要个别记牢。方法是先定时态的框架：记事用过去式，谈现在的想法用现在式，写将来的计划用将来式，三种时态各司其职。易错之处是全篇现在式，把已发生的事写成 I go、I see；动笔前先问自己：这件事发生了没有？发生了便用过去式，这一问能避免大半时态错误。
- 内容考点是日记内容的配搭：事件加感受，例如 I saw pandas. I was so excited! 方法是挑一至两件最难忘的事来写，每件事后面跟一句感受。只记事而没有感受，日记便像流水帐；情感才令文字有温度。易错之处是写了五六件事却每件一笔带过，篇篇平面；倒不如集中写一两件，写得深入，事件与感受交替出现，日记读起来便立体动人，这也是内容分的关键。
- 第一人称考点是日记的人称：用第一人称 I 书写，句子直接而亲切，例如 I was so happy that I smiled all day. 方法是全篇保持同一人称，由第一句到最后一句都是 I。日记的好处是可以直接写出心底想法，这是日记与其他文体的分别，也是它最动人的地方。易错之处是人称忽然转换，由 I 跳成 he 或 she，读者便糊涂了；写完检查一遍人称，前后一致才交卷，这是稳分的最后一步。
- 格式三行考点是日记开头的三行格式：日期 Friday, 20th March、天气 Rainy、称呼 Dear Diary。三行从上而下依次写好，然后才开始正文。Dear Diary 是日记的传统称呼，令文章像与老朋友交谈，语气自然亲切。易错之处是三行次序颠倒，或漏写称呼；格式是日记的门面，三行写得整整齐齐，阅卷者一看便知基本功扎实，这一关切不可失，练习时便要按三行的次序养成习惯。
- 事件配感受考点是事件配感受的写法：每写一件事，便补上一句感受，例如 I saw pandas. I was so excited! 感受句用 I was 加情绪形容词，如 excited、tired、proud，事件与感受交替出现，日记读起来才立体。易错之处是感受句千篇一律，全篇只会一个 happy；情绪词宜轮流运用，高兴、疲倦、自豪各有各的写法，情感便有层次，文章便有起伏，这是日记写得动人的秘诀。
5例题示范 Example
问题：怎样写一篇畅游海洋公园的日记？按格式、总起、事件、感受与期望五步完成。
- 第一步：写格式 — Saturday, 21st March. Weather: Sunny. 日期与天气两项先写好。
- 第二步：总起一句 — Today was the best day! 感叹句开场，心情立刻呈现。
- 第三步：记事件用过去式 — I went to Ocean Park and saw the pandas. went 与 saw 都是不规则过去式。
- 第四步：每事配感受 — I was so excited! The hot dogs were delicious too. 兴奋与美味各有感受句。
- 第五步：期望收结 — I will go again next year. 用将来式写出愿望，日记圆满结束。
- 答案：示范答案：Saturday, 21st March. Weather: Sunny. Today was the best day! I went to Ocean Park and saw the pandas. I was so excited! I will go again next year. 格式、事件、感受与期望俱全，是一篇完整的小学生日记。
6常见错误 Mistakes
76 题快测 Quick check
Q1日记第一行写什么？
Q2日记用什么时态？
Q3日记写什么？
Q4日记用第一人称？
Q5日记结尾？
Q6weather 例子？
8重点回顾 Recap
- 日记格式：日期 → 天气 → Dear Diary。
- 记当日事用过去式。
- 事件 + 感受才有温度。
- 第一人称 I 贯穿全篇。
- 结尾可以展望：I will go again next year.