Proposal 建议书
进阶Purpose → Current → Proposal → Benefits → Cost。
- 建议书五部曲：Purpose → Current situation → Proposal → Benefits → Cost。
- 现状部分要用数据证明问题真实存在，不可以只有话「好严重」。
- 方案要具体到可以执行：哪里、哪个、什么时候开放、使多少钱。
文体小知识：Suggest change.
§课文原文 Passage
1Proposal for a Student Wellness Corner. Purpose: The purpose of this proposal is to suggest a quiet space where students can rest and talk to trained peer supporters during stressful periods, and to explain how such a space could be created within the present school building.
2Current situation: The situation is worrying. The counsellor's room is the only private space available, and appointments are often booked two weeks in advance. In a survey conducted by the Student Union last term, sixty per cent of respondents said they had felt seriously stressed at least once a month, yet most of them had never asked for help because they did not know where to start.
3Proposal: We propose that the unused room next to the prefects' office should be converted into a wellness corner with soft chairs, plants and a suggestion box. Two trained peer supporters would be on duty during lunch breaks, and any student could drop in without booking. Benefits: The corner would give students immediate emotional support and reduce the counsellor's workload at the same time.
4Cost and timeline: The estimated cost is fifteen thousand dollars, mainly for furniture and soundproofing, and we believe this is a small price for a healthier school. Renovation could take place during the Christmas holiday, and the corner could open in January. Since mental health is an urgent issue for our generation, we sincerely hope the school will consider this plan.
§逐句中文翻译 Sentence-by-sentence translation
Proposal for a Student Wellness Corner.
《学生减压角建议书》
Purpose: The purpose of this proposal is to suggest a quiet space where students can rest and talk to trained peer supporters during stressful periods, and to explain how such a space could be created within the present school building.
目的：本建议书旨在建议设立一个宁静空间，让学生在压力大的时期可以休息，与受过训练的朋辈支援员倾诉，并解释怎样在现有校舍之内腾出这样的空间。
Current situation: The situation is worrying.
现况：目前的情况令人担心。
The counsellor's room is the only private space available, and appointments are often booked two weeks in advance.
辅导员房间是唯一可用的私人空间，而且预约往往要提早两星期。
In a survey conducted by the Student Union last term, sixty per cent of respondents said they had felt seriously stressed at least once a month, yet most of them had never asked for help because they did not know where to start.
学生会上学期做了一项调查，六成受访者说自己每个月至少有一次感到极大压力，但大部分人从来没有求助过，因为不知道由哪里开始。
Proposal: We propose that the unused room next to the prefects' office should be converted into a wellness corner with soft chairs, plants and a suggestion box.
建议：我们建议将风纪室旁边的空置房间改装成减压角，配置软椅、植物和意见箱。
Two trained peer supporters would be on duty during lunch breaks, and any student could drop in without booking.
午饭时间会有两位受过训练的朋辈支援员当值，任何同学都毋须预约就可以进来。
Benefits: The corner would give students immediate emotional support and reduce the counsellor's workload at the same time.
好处：减压角可以即时给学生情绪支援，同时减轻辅导员的工作量。
Cost and timeline: The estimated cost is fifteen thousand dollars, mainly for furniture and soundproofing, and we believe this is a small price for a healthier school.
成本与时间表：预计费用是一万五千元，主要用在家私与隔音，我们认为为了一个更健康的校园，这是很小的代价。
Renovation could take place during the Christmas holiday, and the corner could open in January.
装修可以在圣诞假期进行，减压角 1 月就可以开放。
Since mental health is an urgent issue for our generation, we sincerely hope the school will consider this plan.
心理健康是我们这一代迫在眉睫的议题，我们诚挚希望学校考虑这个计划。
1重点摘要 Summary
Purpose → Current → Proposal → Benefits → Cost。
2生字卡 Vocabulary
建议书。
目的。
现状。
建议。
好处。
成本。
时间表。
紧急。
3逐步讲解 Steps
- 目的Purpose 一句讲明想做什么。举个例：The purpose of this proposal is to suggest a quiet space where students can rest and talk to trained peer supporters during stressful periods。
- 现状Current situation 用数据证明问题。举个例：appointments are often booked two weeks in advance；sixty per cent of respondents said they had felt seriously stressed at least once a month——有数有真相。
- 建议Proposal 具体到可以执行。举个例：convert the unused room next to the prefects' office into a wellness corner with soft chairs, plants and a suggestion box，还有两名受训朋辈支援员午饭时间当值、毋须预约。
- 好处 + 成本Benefits 讲双赢：immediate emotional support 加 reduce the counsellor's workload。Cost 有数有期：fifteen thousand dollars，圣诞假施工、一月开放——成本低、见效快，才容易获批。
- 时间表附时间表显示计过数。举个例：Renovation could take place during the Christmas holiday, and the corner could open in January——有时间表的建议书可信度高很多。
- 紧迫感结尾制造正当的迫切感。举个例：Since mental health is an urgent issue for our generation, we sincerely hope the school will consider this plan——urgent 用在议题，不是催对方。
- 五部曲复习结构复习：Purpose（目的）→ Current situation（现状 + 数据）→ Proposal（方案）→ Benefits（好处）→ Cost and timeline（成本 + 时间表）——五部分缺一会扣组织分。
5例题示范 Example
范文《Proposal for a Student Wellness Corner》怎样五步说服学校：目的 → 现状 → 方案 → 好处 → 成本时间表？
- 第一步：Purpose 一句讲清想做什么——设一个减压角，给学生休息和找受训朋辈支援员聊天。
- 第二步：Current situation 用硬数据证明问题逼切——辅导室要两星期前预约；六成受访学生每月至少一次极大压力，却不知从何求助。
- 第三步：Proposal 具体到可以执行——空置房改做 wellness corner，配置软椅、植物、意见箱；午饭时间两名受训朋辈支援员当值，毋须预约。
- 第四步：Benefits 一石二鸟——学生即刻有情感支援，辅导主任工作量同时减轻。
- 第五步：Cost and timeline 显示已计算清楚——一万五千元、圣诞假施工、一月开放；最后用「mental health is an urgent issue」升华收结。
- 答案：这份建议书五步走：Purpose 一句讲明想设减压角；Current situation 用硬数据证明问题——辅导室要两星期前预约、六成受访学生每月起码一次极大压力却不知如何求助；Proposal 具体可行——空置房改做 wellness corner，配置软椅和意见箱，午饭时间有受训朋辈支援员当值，毋须预约；Benefits 强调双赢——学生有即时支援，辅导主任减轻负担；Cost 一万五千元、圣诞假施工、一月启用，令学校觉得低成本快见效。最后用「mental health is an urgent issue」收结，情理兼备。
6常见错误 Mistakes
76 题快测 Quick check
Q1建议书结构？
Q2目的？
Q3现状？
Q4建议？
Q5好处？
Q6成本？
8重点回顾 Recap
- 建议书五部曲：Purpose → Current situation → Proposal → Benefits → Cost。
- 现状部分要用数据证明问题真实存在，不可以只有话「好严重」。
- 方案要具体到可以执行：哪里、哪个、什么时候开放、使多少钱。
- 好处要讲埋对学校有什么著数（减负担、省钱），不要只有讲学生。
- 附上时间表（什么时候施工、什么时候启用）显示你已仔细计算，可信度大增。