Proposal
AdvancedPurpose → Current → Proposal → Benefits → Cost。
- Proposal formula: Purpose → Current situation → Proposal → Benefits → Cost.
- Use data to prove the problem is real, not just 'it is serious'.
- Make the plan workable: where, who, when it opens and how much it costs.
文體小知識：Suggest change.
§Text Passage
1Proposal for a Student Wellness Corner. Purpose: The purpose of this proposal is to suggest a quiet space where students can rest and talk to trained peer supporters during stressful periods, and to explain how such a space could be created within the present school building.
2Current situation: The situation is worrying. The counsellor's room is the only private space available, and appointments are often booked two weeks in advance. In a survey conducted by the Student Union last term, sixty per cent of respondents said they had felt seriously stressed at least once a month, yet most of them had never asked for help because they did not know where to start.
3Proposal: We propose that the unused room next to the prefects' office should be converted into a wellness corner with soft chairs, plants and a suggestion box. Two trained peer supporters would be on duty during lunch breaks, and any student could drop in without booking. Benefits: The corner would give students immediate emotional support and reduce the counsellor's workload at the same time.
4Cost and timeline: The estimated cost is fifteen thousand dollars, mainly for furniture and soundproofing, and we believe this is a small price for a healthier school. Renovation could take place during the Christmas holiday, and the corner could open in January. Since mental health is an urgent issue for our generation, we sincerely hope the school will consider this plan.
§Sentence-by-sentence translation Sentence-by-sentence translation
Proposal for a Student Wellness Corner.
《學生減壓角建議書》
Purpose: The purpose of this proposal is to suggest a quiet space where students can rest and talk to trained peer supporters during stressful periods, and to explain how such a space could be created within the present school building.
目的：本建議書旨在建議設立一個寧靜空間，讓學生在壓力大的時期可以休息，與受過訓練的朋輩支援員傾訴，並解釋怎樣在現有校舍之內騰出這樣的空間。
Current situation: The situation is worrying.
現況：目前的情況令人擔心。
The counsellor's room is the only private space available, and appointments are often booked two weeks in advance.
輔導員房間是唯一可用的私人空間，而且預約往往要提早兩星期。
In a survey conducted by the Student Union last term, sixty per cent of respondents said they had felt seriously stressed at least once a month, yet most of them had never asked for help because they did not know where to start.
學生會上學期做了一項調查，六成受訪者說自己每個月至少有一次感到極大壓力，但大部分人從來沒有求助過，因為不知道由哪裡開始。
Proposal: We propose that the unused room next to the prefects' office should be converted into a wellness corner with soft chairs, plants and a suggestion box.
建議：我們建議將風紀室旁邊的空置房間改裝成減壓角，配置軟椅、植物和意見箱。
Two trained peer supporters would be on duty during lunch breaks, and any student could drop in without booking.
午飯時間會有兩位受過訓練的朋輩支援員當值，任何同學都毋須預約就可以進來。
Benefits: The corner would give students immediate emotional support and reduce the counsellor's workload at the same time.
好處：減壓角可以即時給學生情緒支援，同時減輕輔導員的工作量。
Cost and timeline: The estimated cost is fifteen thousand dollars, mainly for furniture and soundproofing, and we believe this is a small price for a healthier school.
成本與時間表：預計費用是一萬五千元，主要用在傢俬與隔音，我們認為為了一個更健康的校園，這是很小的代價。
Renovation could take place during the Christmas holiday, and the corner could open in January.
裝修可以在聖誕假期進行，減壓角 1 月就可以開放。
Since mental health is an urgent issue for our generation, we sincerely hope the school will consider this plan.
心理健康是我們這一代迫在眉睫的議題，我們誠摯希望學校考慮這個計劃。
1Summary 重點摘要
Purpose → Current → Proposal → Benefits → Cost。
2Vocabulary cards Vocabulary
Suggestion.
Goal.
Now.
What to change.
Advantages.
Expense.
Schedule.
緊急。
3Step by step Steps
- PurposeThe Purpose states the aim in one sentence. Example: The purpose of this proposal is to suggest a quiet space where students can rest and talk to trained peer supporters during stressful periods.
- CurrentThe Current situation proves the problem with data. Example: appointments are often booked two weeks in advance, and sixty per cent of respondents said they had felt seriously stressed at least once a month — numbers carry the truth.
- ProposalThe Proposal must be workable in detail. Example: convert the unused room next to the prefects' office into a wellness corner with soft chairs, plants and a suggestion box, with two trained peer supporters on duty at lunch and no booking needed.
- Benefits + CostBenefits win twice: immediate emotional support plus a lighter counsellor workload. Cost has a figure and a date: fifteen thousand dollars, renovated at Christmas, open in January — cheap and quick is easy to approve.
- TimelineA timeline shows you have done the maths. Example: Renovation could take place during the Christmas holiday, and the corner could open in January — proposals with deadlines feel far more credible.
- UrgencyEnd with legitimate urgency. Example: Since mental health is an urgent issue for our generation, we sincerely hope the school will consider this plan — urgent describes the issue, never the reader.
- Five-part recapRecap: Purpose → Current situation (with data) → Proposal → Benefits → Cost and timeline. Miss any part and the organisation marks go with it.
5Worked example Example
How does the model proposal 'Proposal for a Student Wellness Corner' persuade the school in five steps — purpose, current situation, plan, benefits, cost and timeline?
- Step 1: Purpose states the aim in one sentence — a quiet space where students can rest and talk to trained peer supporters.
- Step 2: Current situation proves the problem with hard data — the counsellor is booked two weeks ahead, and sixty per cent of respondents feel serious monthly stress yet never ask for help.
- Step 3: The proposal is workable in detail — convert the unused room next to the prefects' office, add soft chairs, plants and a suggestion box, with two trained peer supporters on duty at lunch, no booking needed.
- Step 4: Benefits are double — immediate emotional support for students and a lighter workload for the counsellor.
- Step 5: Cost and timeline show the maths is done — fifteen thousand dollars, renovation at Christmas, opening in January — closing with 'mental health is an urgent issue'.
- Answer: The proposal persuades in five steps. The purpose is stated in one sentence; the current situation supplies two hard facts — the counsellor's room is booked two weeks in advance, and sixty per cent of surveyed students feel serious stress monthly but never seek help. The plan itself is concrete: the unused room beside the prefects' office becomes a wellness corner with soft chairs, plants and a suggestion box, staffed by two trained peer supporters at lunch with no booking required. The benefits work both ways — instant support for students, less pressure on the counsellor. Finally, the cost of fifteen thousand dollars and a realistic timeline (Christmas renovation, January opening) make the scheme look cheap and quick, and the closing line about mental health adds moral weight.
6Common mistakes Mistakes
7Quick check Quick check
Q1Structure?
Q2Purpose?
Q3Current?
Q4Proposal?
Q5Benefits?
Q6Cost?
8Recap Recap
- Proposal formula: Purpose → Current situation → Proposal → Benefits → Cost.
- Use data to prove the problem is real, not just 'it is serious'.
- Make the plan workable: where, who, when it opens and how much it costs.
- Sell the benefits to the school too — less workload, low cost — not only to students.
- A timeline (renovation, opening date) shows you have done the maths and builds trust.